The scene we watched was one where the father is on the phone to his daughter's captors. We felt that the speech made by the father was chilling and gave a sinister atmosphere that is typical of the thriller genre. For these reasons we started to make a new script in which there is a flashback of the murder of a girl and the investigation into her death. The girls father then wakes up and goes into the kitchen to make his breakfast. His phone rings once and he then dials the number of his daughter's murderer telling him that he will kill him. This is the end of the opening and prepares the audience for the rest of the film.
After making our decision, we decided to start scripting it. This script can be found below:
Beginning of Flashback:
'Phone rings'
Girl's Room Mate: It's my room mate, please help, I don't know what to do. She's not breathing!
Police Officer: Mr and Mrs Watson, I'm sorry to have to inform you but, we've found a body and we believe it's your daughter.
Girl's Mother: Oh God. No!
[old script used in the investigation used]
End of Flashback:
Girl's Father: Have you found out who did this to my daughter?
Police Officer: I'm sorry Mr Watson, but we can't find him, we're going to have to drop the case.
Girl's Father: You can't do this!
Father's Boss: I'm sorry Mr Watson but I don't think you're cut out for this work line anymore
Girl's Mother: You've got to stop drinking Jack, I need you.
Girl's Father: I will find out who did this
Girl's Mother: It's been 4 years, can't you just let it go?
Girl's Father: It's our daughter! How can you say that?!
Girl's Mother: I'm sorry Jack, I just can't do this anymore, I'm leaving
The script did not get ordered in this way until we started editing. We asked the actors to do voice overs for us and then experimented with which order was most effective. We decided on the order above that features in our film.
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